The reason,why some jokes were unfunny
The music, it does not go with the mood you meant to strike, I thought it was kinda funny, but the music for the so-called funny scenes were were totally buzzkill and killing the monster scene could have been funnier if the expression of the voice acting was more for moment, not for the serious parts(or the not funny scenes.)
But I admit, it wasnt totally blegh!
The plot was kinda off! The ending wasnt even funny, just more like "Oh WTF!"
Just try to add effort to it! If you did then, well..Just take advice from other authors or here!
Remember, If at first you dont succeed, try try until everyone says you suck!
Overall 6/10